Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
As far as I am concerned, most companies show their products more interesting than they are because not only are competitions high between products but also, companies apply marketing strategies. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.
The first reason worth mentioning is that numbers of same products are high enough caused a severe competition between companies. In modern life, the development of technology is happening at a very fast pace and weekly, new products are presented in the market. Since some of these products are similar, companies have to present them more practical in comparison to rival products. For example, with the emergence of transferable computers, many organizations and companies tried to make money from selling them. Therefore, they start producing laptops and the market becomes full of different brands. One specific brand for encouraging customers to buy it say that its battery can work for weeks which was obvious it was a lie. However, many students who need the last longing battery fell for it and buy it which caused the company to make a fortune.
A further more subtle point is that companies use methods such as marketing strategies to persuade people to purchase it. Marketing strategy is a way that is used in recent years. In that, companies will use a famous person or a celebrity to persuade people and since that person has many followers, it influences them to want it. For instance, a car driver who was a champion in driving competitions, advertise a very slow car. In that commercial, he drove at a high speed and peaking up different passengers and says I love my car fast and spacious. However, in the reality, the size of the car was severely meager, and also, the engine of the car was incapable of going at fast speed. In this way, many people were encouraged to buy this car and the company made a lot of money.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, due to having too much competition and the use of marketing techniques, most advertisements display products much better than they really are. Consequently, it is highly beneficial for people to evaluate the truth of the commercial by themselves.
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries 80
- TPO4 3
- Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past 80
- In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age. 70
- Old friends vs new friends 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 660, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'saith', 'says'?
Suggestion: saith; says
...and for encouraging customers to buy it say that its battery can work for weeks whi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, really, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94892473118 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87294417693 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559139784946 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0391692215 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.277777778 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19611532437 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537323501285 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109312676179 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164207704959 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141846157768 0.0645574589148 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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