One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job
One of the vital steps of a human being life is teenager period that He can prepare for his future life, career and so forth. Some people may hold the view that one of the best ways that teenagers could prepare for life is to taking part-time job However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that F.rom my own perspective, the former belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that having a part-time job along with studying in the school brings about learning to take some responsibilities. This helps them to be responsible for whatever they do. It causes to learn to be on time, punctual and careful about their tasks. For example, last summer, I worked at a local restaurant in my town. First, I did not know anything. I forgot what the customers demanded, so they were waiting for more than normal time and then they complained to my boss. As a result, I learned that my duty how is important even as a waitress. Hence, I tried to do my duties carefully and in the best way.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that working teenagers can be financially independent of their parents. Being an independent person in early ages helps children to learn how to live by themselves, how to manage their money. Therefore, in the future, they do not waste their money on unnecessary stuff and they know the worth of money. Continuing of my example as a waiter, before working I spent my money on a myriad of unnecessary things. It did not worth me. However, after work, I did not waste a lot of money and decided to save my money for my college instead of asking my parents to pay my tuition fee.
In conclusion, this is my deep belief that taking a part-time job not only causes children to take responsibilities but also they become financially independent. Therefore, I highly suggest that parents should encourage their children to find a part-time job
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 2, column 272, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learning'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: learning
...onsible for whatever they do. It causes to learn to be on time, punctual and careful abo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1662.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65546218487 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7043537737 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535014005602 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9260394175 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4736842105 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34321480427 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925715794661 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936266450893 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226164536175 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10384718441 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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