Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave
It is not deniable television effect on human beings life. Some people may hold the view that movies the media have more negative impacts than positive impacts on the Youngers behave. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint. From my own perspective, the former belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason for coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that movies and television are always attractive entertainments which influence young people. They are full of adventures and excitants that every young one is willing to do in own life. They full of violating and immoral scenes which especially persuade young people to do them. My cousin’s experience is a compelling example of it. My uncle’s family used to live in a neighborhood in a good part of the city. When my cousin was a teenager he used to watch a variety of movies especially action ones. Hence, he learned to hit his friends in a way he saw in the movies. one day he even brooked his neighborhood’ leg with a bat. Finally, his parents realized that the movies influenced his behavior. Then they have forbidden him to watch television for a long time.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that movies show a fancy world to his spectators that may have a negative effect. The young people when seeing the head role of a movie reaches with a prosperous life by gambling or smuggling tempt to do like them to be successful. For instance, many years ago my friend and I watched a movie that had happened in a casino. One of its customers was lucky and won a lot of money during gambling in the casino. After winning he became a rich man in the city and married a beautiful woman. My friends wanted to be rich as the man, hence he went to a casino in our town instead of going his classes in the high school. After many months I graduated from high school and went to a university. However, my friends have not finished his education. He always borrows money from his parents. He not only has not prosperous but also is a needy man.
In conclusion, this is my deep belief movies and televisions not only cause young people to do violate behaviors butt also brings about they do some illegal activities. Therefore, I highly believe that that the media have a negative influence on young people behave.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67695961995 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71476382407 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529691211401 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9978311009 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9259259259 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5925925926 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.7037037037 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253905762262 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588253223629 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0750091918169 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170949995207 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573898982034 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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