One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
In today's world, one of the concerns that parents try to deal with is how to prepare their children for adult life. While most parents believe that it is not good to encourage children to take part in a part-time job, I tend to argue that having a part-time job is beneficial to children in numerous ways. In the following essay, I will vindicate my stance through three noticeable reasons.
To begin with, participating in part-time jobs can boost children's communicative skills as well as their confidence. In fact, children can learn how to interact and cooperate with their colleagues and people in order to get the best result. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was fourteen, I had a job in a hospital. I had to cooperate with other nurses to meet sick people’s needs. For example, some of us brought food and others checked the health conditions of them and things like that. Working there taught me how to communicate with people in order to understand their problems as well as how to build a close rapport between me and my colleagues, helping me build confidence and self-reliance as I realized how capable I was. Thus, Had I not have high levels of interpersonal skills and self-confidence, I could not have found a decent job in the future.
Another equally significant point is that by taking part in a part-time job, children can experience independence. As a matter of fact, they should cope with the obstacles they face by themselves without having the aid of their parents. For instance, my parents always relieved the struggle between my brother and his friends. However, after he worked in a company, a conflict caused friction between my brother and his colleagues. So, he learned how to solve the problem by speaking not fighting as he got fired after hurting his colleague. This example shows that children can learn how to be on their own when facing difficult situations, preparing them for the difficulties of their future life.
Last but not least, having a part-time job when children are not adults helps them practice financial independence. As a result of this, they can buy everything they need on their own, feeling more sense of happiness. To illustrate this, last day I read an article in the field of independence. The author suggested that children who could afford to purchase their own needs felt self-satisfaction, leading them to be happy.
All in all, engaging in part-time jobs can be advantageous to children. This is because not only can they be more sociable and self-confident but they can also be more independent. Also, children can experience financial independence. This is why I believe that parents should encourage their children to take a part-time job.
- it is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job- TPO 26 66
- Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. 90
- TPO 28 71
- ecause the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer-TPO 31 73
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs felt" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'felt' or 'to be felt'.
Suggestion: felt; to be felt
...ould afford to purchase their own needs felt self-satisfaction, leading them to be h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91612903226 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95704476976 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498924731183 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.6276062247 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.44 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424368599282 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118132706918 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118866137356 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259253313255 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0893308088278 0.0645574589148 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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