In order to encourage children to study harder, parents should avoid letting them watch television.
Some people think watching television has bad effects on studying, so it is important to prohibit children from watching it. However, in my opinion, watching TV has some benefits for children to study harder due to providing them with useful information that motivates to study and relieving their stress.
To begin with, it is more advantageous to watch TV than ban them from doing it for their concentration on studying. There are a lot of educative programs in television to motivate to study. Many programs stimulate children’s curiosity such as documentary programs about nature, countries and science. They give children some desire to know about them more. Then, they search them on the internet or read books to study them. For example, my friend’s son get a lot of knowledge from television. One day, he watched a documentary about the nature and he wanted to know more things about forests. So, he studied about the environment and enjoyed doing it. Now, he is trying to become a ecologist. This shows watching TV provides children with a lot of educative information, which let them enjoy studying about the information more.
On top of that, watching TV is more beneficial in that it helps children relieve stress. The society is becoming more competitive and demand more higher scores, which gives students more stress. So, their stress builds up more and more, but there is not enough time to get rid of the stress. Watching TV just a little time allows them to refresh and gives some smile. Then, it has good effects on studying harder. For example, my brother who is a student at the Harvard university removed his stress by watching entertainment shows when he had some break time. He said watching it provided him with new power to study more and got rid of his stress. This indicates doing it is better for children to study harder.
To sum up, if children want to watch TV, it is better to do it since it provides educative programs that motivates their imagination and helps remove their stress. In conclusion, I firmly believe that it is good for them to watch television to concentrate on studying.
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- some people say that the internet provides us with a lot of valuable information, others think that access to so many information creates problem, which view do you agree with. 60
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 692, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...d doing it. Now, he is trying to become a ecologist. This shows watching TV provi...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'higher' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: higher
...is becoming more competitive and demand more higher scores, which gives students more stres...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87912087912 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72890991824 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489010989011 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 541.8 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7076061206 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7272727273 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5454545455 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238205115561 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859236105837 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653462484247 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16926721412 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458260724804 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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