some people say that the internet provides us with a lot of valuable information, others think that access to so many information creates problem, which view do you agree with.
It is debatable whether the internet provides us with a lot of valuable information or not. It is an intriguing question because opinions regarding this issue could be different relying on individual perspectives. In my opinion, however, I support that the internet offers a lot of valuable information for us.
First of all, the internet gives us a lot of precious information and it helps us live the globalized world because it broadens people’s perspectives. These days, the world is becoming globalized, so it is important to have knowledge about other cultures, lifestyles and perspectives. People can do this by getting information on the internet. For example, when I was a high school student, I took the history of world class. I interested in learning others’ history and culture, so I often searched the internet about what I wanted to know such as the presidents of the USA. Then, I knew of Wikipedia and I have used the page very often. I can get and give some information and communicate with other people who are Americans, European and so on. It is very useful and I am able to get a lot of valuable information better. So the internet makes me broaden my perspectives, which helps me get a job. It shows that the internet gives us a lot of precious information and it is helpful.
Also, the quality of our lives is higher because the internet provides us a lot of important information. The internet lets us know what we should know. It reduces the gap of knowledge between the poor and the rich. It is easy for almost everyone to access a lot of information. It makes people happy. If there wasn’t the internet, it would have been hard to get some information and there would have had some fights to have the right to get information. So, It is more beneficial to get a lot of knowledge through the internet. We don’t forget that the internet makes our lives better.
In conclusion, I think that the information getting from the internet helps us, not creates many problems.
- Universities should spend as much money on sports as they do on libraries 50
- The news media is a reliable source of unbiased information 38
- Providing students with grades promotes learning 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for young people to select a job in the same field as their parents than to choose a different career for themselves 80
- In order to encourage children to study harder, parents should avoid letting them watch television. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 720, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ation and communicate with other people who are Americans, European and so on. It is ve...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 280, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...veryone to access a lot of information. It makes people happy. If there wasn'...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, regarding, so, then, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 350.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77714285714 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96761981172 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471428571429 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6786912353 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9090909091 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372883643353 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113692735477 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0864927680331 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235657497316 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0213992989681 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.