People can solve important problems by themselves or with the help from their family members, so there is no need for the government to help them.
Happy life, the objective everyone strives for, has been valued and even triggers heated discussion over whether it is necessary for people to get the help of the government. Obstacles, in many people’s view, could be solved by people themselves or their family members so it is the government that wouldn’t be indispensable. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that the government still play an important role in locating problems due to it can help people to solve professional and life problems.
What must be prioritized is that the government, not individual, will help people to deal troubles with offering better education and creating more jobs opportunities. To begin with, with help from the official, people will obtain better educational backgrounds and resource, which is vital to job-hunt. In detail, the financial support from the government to some families with low income, will reduce the financial burden to parents so their children can enter schools and acquire knowledge; on the contrary, how could the impoverished families to confront the expensive tuition fee? Moreover, it is the government that can help people to find suitable jobs and decrease the unemployment rate. To specific, the more position the government generates, the lower unemployment rate could be, guaranteeing the foundation of quality life for many people; in contrast, people cannot generate or reduce the unemployment independently.
What is equally worth discussing is that the government, rather than oneself, can solve some crucial problems, including the environmental and infrastructure problems. Initially, only the government can solve environmental problems. Specifically, the environment can be better by officials to publish racial laws, which limit industries and mills to pollute the environment; on the other hand, improving the environment by one person or his family member is absolutely impossible. Furthermore, the government will facilitate and repair some old infrastructures. To explain further, officials can increase the budget on revamping considerable infrastructures such as widening roads, adding network access, and modifying other devices; however, people are incapable of improving the base facilities because they don’t have sufficient money and methods to solve these problems.
Occupations problems, the severe problems to adult, can be solved by the government. Life problems, being more austere in recent years, can be located by the government policies. To conclude, only the government can place people as beneficiaries and give them the best quality of life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.70050761421 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.204179773 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55076142132 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1270298864 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.375 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380959135183 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126645403868 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650689510376 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227261005328 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921933532864 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.08 10.9000537634 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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