Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Nowadays, increasingly companies start to take care of their employees and to offer different plans to improve their motivation and happiness, which are shorten working days but prolonging the working hours or shorten the working hours but prolonging the working days. Some people may think that it is easier to have a job which we work shorter hours. However, I believe that it is more enjoyable to have a job where we work shorter days such as three days a week for longer hours than to have a job where we have to work five days per week for shorter hours.
To begin with, working is secondary but life is necessary. As we all know, there are many things important than earning money such as spending time with family and friends. Staffs would not have enough time to accompany their family and friends, and no time to enjoy their personal life if they have to work five days a week. In contrast, employees will have more free time to take care of their family members and to maintain their relationships and to pursue what they really what to do. For example, my parents, as travel lovers, they don’t have time to prepare a good trip and can’t take trips frequently in a year. Furthermore, using vacation to go on a travel is definitely being overcrowded and losing a lot of relaxing of traveling. Nevertheless, my parents will be satisfied to have a more spare time to plan a great travel and to avoid the peak travel seasons if they just need work three days a week. Thus, I trust that working three days is better than working five days.
In addition, working three days a week, which means the working time being centralization to employees. It is easier for people to concentrate short time than concentrating a long time so that people will feel easier to focus on working three days than keeping the focus on working five days. Besides, staffs will have the higher efficiency to finish their working task if they obtain enough time to refresh themselves. Hence, working three days also can provide employees more time to achieve refreshment than working five days. For instance, Real Madrid, my favorite football club. The coaching team gave football player enough spare time to adjust their condition of physical and mental to prepare the final game instead of training mandatory every day. As a result, Real Madrid players became more active and more clam in the final games and they won the Europe Champion three years consistently. The Real Madrid’s successful experience can inspire companies that working shorter days is much better than working longer days.
In conclusion, owing to the above reasons, I would like to say that working shorter days but longer hours is easier than working longer days but shorter hours. Employees wouldn’t have enough time to embrace their personal life if they have to work for five days. Also, it is hard for employees to keep the focus on jobs and without time to refresh themselves for higher working efficiency. Therefore, I agree with this statement that it is more enjoyable to have a job where we only have three days to work for longer hours than we must work five days per week for shorter hours.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'shortened'.
Suggestion: shortened
...eir motivation and happiness, which are shorten working days but prolonging the working...
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Line 3, column 668, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'travel'.
Suggestion: travel
...r. Furthermore, using vacation to go on a travel is definitely being overcrowded and los...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2635.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 551.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78221415608 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48931564275 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40834845735 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2314851537 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.565217391 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9565217391 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21739130435 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473184002421 0.236089414692 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167699023968 0.076458572812 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149710561516 0.0737576698707 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372683761133 0.150856017488 247% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130784955369 0.0645574589148 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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