When parents cannot afford time to accompany with their children, they could choose to send their children to child-care center where many children are cared together; or they could send their children to an individual caregiver. Which one is better?
In the modern society, the stressful workloads make parents do not have enough time to take care of their children. Under this circumstance, many parents turn to send their children to the child-care center where a lot of children are cared together. Meanwhile, some parents want their children to have more attention, they would like to choose the individual caregiver. In my opinion, I think that the child-care center will be a better choice for parents.
To begin with, the most important consideration for parents is the children’s security in the public place. Undeniably, a child-care center has much better protection than an individual caregiver. For example, in my hometown, numerous child-care center have used stainless steel plates for children. These plates will never be broken so that they would not like the glass plate pieces which can hurt children’s hands or legs. What’s more, if some strange people want to go into the child-care center, the security will ask them some information such as name, occupation, even address. These behaviors to avoid the dangerous people enter the center. However, in the individual caregiver, they may not have such meticulous process.
In addition, a child-care center where have so many children that they can learn how to make friends with other peers. According to a survey from the Stanford University, they claim that in the child-care center, a significate percentage of children becoming more empathic in the experiment. After the longtime observation, they found that children facility an ability to concern about other kids. For instance, if a boy feels upset, the other one would give him his favorite sugar or encourage him to get rid of the negative emotion. Nonetheless, in the individual caregiver, this spirit cannot be cultivated for children.
To sum up, parents should choose the child-care center given that the child-center can offer the much better protection than an individual caregiver and the children in the child-center can make friends with others and become a warm-heart person!
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, nonetheless, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30211480363 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89525303206 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534743202417 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.769676589 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.235294118 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.17647058824 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.500982795661 0.236089414692 212% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173044784969 0.076458572812 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113486125537 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.33241180417 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121090267313 0.0645574589148 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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