People spend too much of time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Do u agree or disagree?
Many people love to cherish there life by enjoying in what they do but there are some individuals who enjoy there time in Activites which they are not supposed to do. Personally, I believe that we should spend our time in what we are supposed to do. In my opinion, we should have personal enjoyment in following ways.
Time is always precious. We need to utilize the time in a decent and systematic way. The time that we spend must be valuable because we learn something called time management. For instance, I am a mother of two kids who stayed with them when they were small.I love my kids and I have seen with my own eyes how my kids have grown and how I have given them personal values and traditions that I followed back in India. If today I was working I could not have seen their children and enjoyed some precious moment with them. Furthermore, when they were sick I was always beside them which helped me because, If I was working I had to keep them in daycare in such a bad state. All in all, I wouldn't have a personal life with them and they wouldn't have received the bonding between us.
When kids turn to a teen or a younger generation there are many serious situations that we hear in news today. For example, some students in the university enjoy their personal life by taking drugs and spending most of their time in pubs and bars. If these students use their precious time in studies and also have a gala time doing good work like volunteering it would be a great help to the college and the society. However, the teen generation spends their time doing wrong things and they don't realize the effect of taking drugs as their personal enjoyment. They always forget that drugs may lead them to death which will be a piece of sad news to their parents and their loved ones.
Therefore, I conclude by stating that we must have personal enjoyment but can only cherish it if we are using in a proper way.
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...but can only cherish it if we are using in a proper way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4297752809 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30004384286 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488764044944 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5466557272 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5625 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258210872797 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957868655458 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105613003393 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174787071114 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136320729929 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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