People spend too much of time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Do u agree or disagree?

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
...o stayed with them when they were small.I love my kids and I have seen with my ow...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...care in such a bad state. All in all, I wouldnt have a personal life with them and they...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...have a personal life with them and they wouldnt have received the bonding between us. ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... their time doing wrong things and they dont realize the effect of taking drugs as t...
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Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...but can only cherish it if we are using in a proper way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4297752809 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30004384286 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488764044944 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5466557272 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5625 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258210872797 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957868655458 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105613003393 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174787071114 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136320729929 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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