People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
There is great debate about individuals spend time on personal delight instead of things they should do. Despite the fact, there are differing opinions. Some people think that doing personal enjoyment can help to improve the efficiency of their work. Other people, however, argue that it is beneficial in many ways for people to not expect doing things they like because it is not possible. I , myself, agree with the first argue. In this essay, I will address three potential benefit of doing personal enjoyment.
First of all, when a person does things, she or he delight to do it, as a result, the performance will be higher and the output will be much effective. For example, my friends like to do music very much, but his parents forced him to do professional sports. Although he is doing what they wanted but he is not happy and doesn’t care that much about performance. May be, If they let him to work on music, he would get more successful.
second, continuously individuals spend more vitality and time for things they like to do instead of things they don’t like. as a result, individuals are would appreciate their time whereas they are doing things they like. For occasion, one of my friends always in office attempt to finish their errands which doesn’t like and begin n what she inclines toward to do.
To sum up, I believe doing what you pleased to do is much effective and more beneficial. This is why always we should do what we like to do.in differentiate, doing things with you appreciate would bring up your vitality, and unquestionably, he or she would spend more time to do it which is positive see. Hence, this see is much superior.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 393, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... they like because it is not possible. I , myself, agree with the first argue. In ...
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Line 3, column 52, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'delights'.
Suggestion: delights
...l, when a person does things, she or he delight to do it, as a result, the performance ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Second
... music, he would get more successful. second, continuously individuals spend more vi...
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Line 4, column 125, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...o do instead of things they don’t like. as a result, individuals are would appreci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, whereas, for example, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 292.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71232876712 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57286276861 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9259373163 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.588278131908 0.236089414692 249% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205812525283 0.076458572812 269% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142200515935 0.0737576698707 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.389613818213 0.150856017488 258% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.077711756269 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 86.8835125448 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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