Question :Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's progressive and sophisticated world, it is critically important that children be adequately prepared for adult life. Personally, I believe that parents should persuade their teenage children taking a part-time job. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, taking a part-time job makes children to gain more experience they need in their adult life. In schools, children learn lessons theoretically from their teachers while in a job environment they face different challenges, making them to learn how to handle problems in the future. As a case in point, there is a body of prosperity research that I read recently. The researchers conducted an interview with employees from several companies, who are successful in their jobs, to ascertain what is the most important factor made them to be a prosperous person in their jobs as well as their life. The statistics revealed that a host of them, more than roughly 90 percent of the participants, took at least one part-time job when they were at their teenage age. By and large, this finding can at least partly explain why taking a part-time job as a teenager is of critical importance and preparing them for adult life.
Furthermore, by taking part-time job, teenagers can earn money so they can use it in critical situations in the adult life. In fact, teenagers have more opportunity to earn and save money they may need in the future. Since My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. When I was a high school student, I was working in a coffeeshop. Since I am such a person who prefer to save his money, taking a part-time job as a student gave me a chance to have a lot of money at that age. Later, it helped me to start my business autonomously. If I had not taken that part-time job in my adolescent, I could not have started my business without my parent assistance.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that parents should assist their teenage children by inspiring them to take a part-time job. Not only this makes children to gain experience but also makes them to earn money that they surely need in their adult life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...save money they may need in the future. Since My personal experience is a compelling ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, well, while, at least, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1787.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77807486631 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82171718094 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494652406417 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5730431185 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2777777778 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354636178947 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121644164227 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963094157618 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242328661814 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536400413602 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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