Should we save our land for endangered animals?
Nowadays, many animal species are in danger by the over-exploitation of nature due to the increase of population of the human. These populations need the house, foods, cloth, and other basic needs that many of them provide from the nature that is common with animals. Definitely, some people if asked would agree with the statement that we must save lands for endangered animals while others have a negative attitude. As I am concerned, I completely agree with the opinion that we must care about endangered animals. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments for supporting my views.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that if we ignore the importance of care of endangered animals, they would extinct in the near future. On the earth, human and animals and plants consist of the unit ecosystem that every member of this ecosystem depends on each other. Sometimes we think the only things that matter is meeting the demands of human in any price even with destroying the animals or plants, while, we do not know the disadvantages of our action will hurt ourselves. To illustrate that ideas let’s consider the following example. In the countryside of my hometown, some people prey foxes because of valuable skin. The number of the fox’s decrease dramatically, on the other side, the number of rabbits increase because they are prey for foxes. In fact, the predator-prey relation controls the population of the rabbits. But, in recent years, rabbits destroy agricultural crops and lead to the many obstacles for farmers. As you can see, we as a part of this ecosystem have not another choice unless respect to the right for other animals and species because eventually, we will injure from the results of our action.
Another reason that deserves some words is that if we make use of all lands there won’t be enough land for animal’s habitat. Over the past decades, we devastated the wild land that was the home of many animals. We should apply some measurements to protect the poor animal. They need somewhere to breeding and feeding and ultimately for the living. For instance, we can determine some protective area that allocated just for animals and any person not allow to exploit from it. In my country, there are some protective plains and forest that people are not let to cut down the trees and kill the animals. If someone offends the rules, he or she pays a costly fine or in some cases might have the prison sentence. Furthermore, awareness of people about the worth of the protection of the endangered animals can help to the enhancement of their responsibility for more cooperation to defense of these poor animals.
By the way of conclusion, base on the arguments explored above, I am off the opinion that it is our duty to save the threatened animals because they are important part of an ecosystem that we are in it and the extinction of them influenced our lives besides we should dedicate some protect area for animals to protect their lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 468, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'exploiting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: exploiting
...st for animals and any person not allow to exploit from it. In my country, there are some ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for instance, in fact, by the way, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2506.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 513.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88499025341 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70967225951 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495126705653 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 813.6 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9728078057 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.956521739 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3043478261 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21739130435 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.42672573276 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104033481819 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980336382414 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268826809304 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432022155558 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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