in some countries, teenagers have jobs ehile they are still students. do you think this is a good idea.
Students' work has always been a debatable issue among people, especially parents. Some people believe that it is beneficial for students to work; they think that working makes students independent. They will be so powerful adults who can face problems in their future life easily, but others disagree with them, and they think students should study and enjoy spending time with their friends. I personally believe that working is not appropriate for students because two reasons.
First of all, students cannot thoroughly focus on their studies while they are working. If students spend a part of their day doing a job, they will be physically and mentally exhausted. So their function in class decline. For instance, when I was a high school student, I had a part-time job in the campus cafeteria for one year. Every day after school, I went there and worked late at night. So I could not sleep well. The next day in the morning classes, I was too tired to concentrate on lectures, and I was concerned about reaching my workplace on time in the evening classes. So I was not able to learn effectively. After that one year, all of my scores decreased.
Additionally, students cannot manage their money correctly. By working, students can earn money that their parents do not know about; as a result, they cannot control their children. Some students will be financially independent, but they do not have any information about how they spend their income, which can harm them. Some of them buy drugs and will be addicted. Some merchants motorcycles and drive them without a driving license, so their money can cause some irrecoverable incidents.
To sum up, despite the advantages of students work in several aspects. It is not worthwhile working besides studying due to declining the students learning capacity, and it can have hazardous effects on students` future life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, so, well, while, as to, for instance, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01916932907 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71191247478 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591054313099 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.6487677818 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.55 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.65 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20786516759 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654980118624 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611250161545 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132158107867 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336768748781 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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