Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Whether providing students with money for their high marks is a good idea or not remains open to debate. There is a broad spectrum of opinions regarding this controversial issue. While some people believe that there are some disadvantages about offering students money for their effort to study, I contend that its merits outweigh the demerits. In the following paragraphs I shall put forth my arguments to support my views.
Admittedly, children are responsible for their studying and allocating some money for their high grade might overshadow the importance of education. However, it can help students for their financial issues. In fact, it would make student more independent for they possess their own money. Moreover, this procedure might enable them to learn basics of budgeting principles which can be pretty precious for their future life. A prime example of this matter could be students who manage to have a program for their expenses, they also might save some of their earning for rainy days. Consequently, this method would result in improving children's independency.
Having considered autonomy as an impressive influence of paying children some money for each high score they get in school, I can vividly find out that this strategy is also beneficial for motivation enhancement. Obviously, children are eager to obtain some money in order to buy their favorite objects. If they know that they are offered money provided that they manage to get high grades at school, they will probably try to concentrate more on their lessons. As a result, parents are allowed to encourage their children for studying.
To conclude, it can be clear from the argument presented above that in spite of the fact that some people opine that students should not receive money for their good marks, I am strongly of the conviction that offering school-age some money for getting high band scores would help them to be independent as well as motivated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, in fact, as a result, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14106583072 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65225252396 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567398119122 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.1710267554 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.333333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487738485234 0.236089414692 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161716189705 0.076458572812 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928281425894 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303637745032 0.150856017488 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.091512433901 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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