Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Education is becoming an important aspect of life for the most people all over the world. Parents try to provide lots of facilities for their children and encourage them to show their highest performance in education levels. Thus, Part of parents tend to stimulate the motivation of their kids to get high mark by offering money. However, from my perspective, I definitely refute this view with the reasons stated below.
Parents can use different approaches to encourage their children to get high score in school. They choose to give money as a reward for each high score. Although they believe that money has a positive impact on children to motivate them studying hard, they do not notice the effects of prize money on their kid's health mental. For example, when the students give money from their parents for the high mark, they only think on how to achieve money. Thinking to grasp money will diminish their concentration on lessons and maybe they persuade them to cheat on the exams to reach their goal. However giving money can motivate the students to try hard to get high mark, repetition continuously will make a harmful impact on children's behavior.
Moreover, parents offer money due to the lack of time. They just do work to provide sufficient facilities for their children to meet the requirements. They care about their children´s behavior not more than their customer. Admittedly, when children confront to the irresponsibility of their parents, they can not learn anything about morality thus, money is becoming the first priority in their lives. Thus, spending more time with children after school and communicating to solve their problem can be a better decision to improve their grades as well as moral behaviors.
To sum up, based on points above mentioned, I concede that giving money as a present for each high grade can not help students continuously to have improvements in their study. Parents should devote more time to communicate with their children which will be far more beneficial.
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- Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? 76
- Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 590, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...cheat on the exams to reach their goal. However giving money can motivate the students ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10447761194 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67149336701 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531343283582 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9115804755 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.588235294 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7058823529 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437091211278 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154382575543 0.076458572812 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701815614374 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264414219971 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082261490949 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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