Some people offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Studying in the school has always a challenging and boring thing that children can face with it. Some people may hold the view that parents should pay money for children if they gain high grade in the school. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint. From my own perspective, the former belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that gaining money motivates children to study hard and gain great grades. Since they have to study and do their homework, if there is an external agent to encourage them to study better, it will promote their education. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a high school student, I was not a good student. I always got bad grades. Therefore, my parents talk to me and tell me if I get great grades in this semester, they will pay money for my grades. Because I wanted to go on a trip with my friends in the summer, I try to study hard so that I could get high grades.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that giving money to children abeles them to be financially independent. They can focus on their studies while planning for earning money from their parents. They can learn how to manage the money how to spend on stuff they need. Following my example, I saved a hoard of money in this way. Finally, in summer, I could get the money I need to travel with my friends. While I was packing my stuff, one of my friends told me he can’t come with us. Since he could not gather money and his parents did not pay him.
In conclusion, this is my deep belief that getting money from parents for great grades not only motivate them to study better but also bring about children become financially dependent. Therefore, I highly suggest that it is better for children are paid by their parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52463768116 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.434206281 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507246376812 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0124697117 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3333333333 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80952380952 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309287375665 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923240362922 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952171833748 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213900654391 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048217130873 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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