It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job
The job has a crucial role in human being’s life. Human being works due to his financial and mental needs. Some people may hold the view that it is better for children to opt for their parents’ job. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that. From my own perspective, the former belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that the children are aware of all aspects of their parents’ job. In other words, they know the dilemma and difficulties of their jobs along with the money they can earn by this job, and the advantageous of their jobs. For example, my parents were teachers. All my children had spent in their schools. I went to their classes and watched them when they were teaching. In addition, I knew their income how to impact our lives. When I want to choose my major in the university, I decided to be a teacher like my parents, for I knew a lot of information about being a teacher. Now, I am happy to have such a job. If my parents have not been teachers, I would not have abled to gather the real and precious information about teaching.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that children can use the reputation of their families by being successful in t their profession. Thanks to knowing their families, people can confide in them. Then, they can boost their careers at the beginning rather than other once and they can get easily the top of the success. For example, considering a one whose parents are doctors. And he decides to attend the medical school and be a doctor like his parents. During his education, he can go to the parents’ office and people can meet him. So after graduation, he can work with his parents. Since his parents have a good reputation, his patient will be increased as the time passes.
In conclusion, this is my deep belief that having parents job not only give good information about the job for children but also it can promote their career in the short time. Therefore, I highly suggest that it is better to choose a family career as a future job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61538461538 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59584961814 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530769230769 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3274920604 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.0 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402746578636 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110160439349 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109850494583 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.275644636142 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927903527731 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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