Some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while others think realistic goals are more important. Which do you prefer and why?
Goals in the life are like fuel for an engine. They gives us the motivation to going ahead in life, putting aside all the barriers come to us. However, the question is which one of the two ambitious dreams or realistic goals would be more worth pursuing in our lives? In this regard, many might opine that focus on ambitious dreams is like holding some fantasy, which would never be a firm string to cling. On the other side of the coin, others firmly believe that dream is the thing that gives meant to the life, without which life would be so routine and boring. I personally subscribe to the view that anyone who fosters a dream in her/his mind should chase it. I hold this opinion for two main reasons, which I will elucidate in the following essay.
To begin with, today’s modern world would not have the same shape as we see today. In other words, technology and all the facilities we enjoy in our everyday lives would disappear without ones who did not put borders on fostering their ambitions, trying their best to make them come true. For instance, if the Edison had given up his dream of inventing a new source of energy providing light, we would have never touch the delight of enjoying a variety of technologies based on the electricity including the telephone, the internet, to name but a handful. Thus, you see, taking the ambitions out of the frame, we would have lived like other animals on the earth, and never ever would have tasted the new worlds we have created.
The second reason that deserves a few words to write is that in pursuit of dreams we will discover new facets of our abilities and self, otherwise would remain buried and voiceless. I believe that the inner voice whispering inside even some impossible dreams is the real philosophy of our existence, giving us guidance on how to live the life. I should clarify the point by a compelling example of my experience. I majored in chemistry engineering at the university, but due to some conditions in our country, the jobs associate with engineering are more secured than professions in arts. For nearly 10 years, I was a disappointed and unsatisfied with my life because my heart- wish was to be an actor not an engineer. Stage was my dream, but there was a long distance between me and that. However, one day, I decided to pursue my dreams instead of continuing regret about not being an actor. Therefore, I enroll in theater performance class in our community cultural center, and it was so amazing that I have surprising talent in performing. All the suppression I had received during work disappeared, and I felt I was flourishing. Now I am very good at acting, enjoying the life. Thus, taking a walk on the wild side, and following dreams help us to live our desired life.
To wrap it up, I, firmly believe that chasing dreams even if they seem impossible at first is a better idea than take a realistic goal with a routine and predefined path. I feel this way because not only will it cause dramatic progresses in human beings life as it did, but it helps us discover our capabilities, enjoying our desire lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: give
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Suggestion: much might; a good deal of might
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, even so, for instance, i feel, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2562.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 554.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62454873646 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56012173644 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537906137184 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6317790566 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.75 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0833333333 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04166666667 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133307873111 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039916940191 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494574140566 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.084504143711 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624046377383 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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