Some people hold the belief that traditional energy sources such as coal or oil are cheaper than the cleaner energy sources, so they believe that traditional energy sources are more reliable and useful. However, I think we should use cleaner energy sources to protect the environment. I will elaborate my discussion from three reasons.
First of all, the cleaner energy can improve the social efficiency wholly because using the cleaner energy can improve the quality of the environment and reduce the pollution. For factories which have a lot of workers, better environment can definitely bring the better working conditions, so the output of the factories can be enhanced.In many developing countries, limited environment - caused by the traditional energy sources - usually decrease the motivation of the workers, so both the quality and quantity of the products are restricted by the upset manufactors. It is obvious that if more cleaner energy will be used by these countries, their enviorment will eventually better and improve the whole socical efficiency.
Secondly, the cleaner energy can be the catalyst of the technology improvement. When people tag into the new cleaner energy, they will embrace the new technology to have a better understanding about the cleaner energy. For instance, the wind farm need a lot of scientists to struggle with the material to produce the durable generater of the electricity, which can clearly improve the level of the technology. In contract, if people just focus on the traditional energy sources, they will somewhat restrain the relative technology’s enhancement, since they just notice how to use the energy sources instead of how to develop new methods to find new energy sources. In this fast-changing world, the lack of the new technology is so bad for a country or a company.
Finally, some people will keep the opinion that the traditional energy sources are cheaper to use and can bring the possibility to the economical benifit. Nevertheless, I want to remind them that the traditional energy sources are not reusable and can not be recycled, in the using of the oil or coal, we will find that the number of them is going down so quickly and eventually, the number will to the zero. In this turn, the price of the traditional will be higher due to the lack of them.
In conclusion, the energy using is crossing a lot of fields around the world, so it is a cofilicated question for many people to bother with it. However I still believe that in 21st century world, we need to focus more on the new cleaner energy, it is benifical for both the environment and overselves.
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Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02511415525 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83899117078 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.436073059361 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.1643468907 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5625 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.375 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341664642063 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123663354898 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103914113239 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215395306987 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0982770707462 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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