People have various views about whether part of public expenditure should be allocated to supporting artists. While some individuals agree that politicians ought to financially encourage these artists, others assume that this is not necessary. Although the first point of view appears to be valid to some extent, I am more convinced by the latter one due to the significance of other national aspects and the possibility of creating an unfair situation.
On the one hand, there are 2 main reasons why it could be argued that the state budget should be spent on artists. First, art, which not only represents the public but also reflects the society as a whole, plays a vital role in today's life. Through financially supporting artists, administration is allowed to have another approach to the country, thereby better understanding the citizens and recognising initial problems within the nation more easily. Another point to make is than creative arts can contribute to the promotion of cities. In liverpool, for example, there are several new statues and sculptures in the docks area of the city. Beside generating a more complex understanding about the culture and history of the city, these art works also serve as attraction locations for international tourists, which greatly develop the tourism of the whole country, and, at the same time, improves the national image of the nation over the world.
On the other hand, I firmly hold the opinion that the government should not spend the national expenditure on artists. Firstly, money should be otherwised diverted into other aspects of the country which are believed to be more practical. Medicine, for instance, ought to be more to be more financially focused on owning to the fact that every residents' mental and physical well-being is made sure to be protected in the long term thanks to a well-developed medicine and professional doctors, which is seen to be much more profound than the briefly comforting feeling given by seeing a piece of art. A further point to discuss is that artist is seen as a job, just like teacher, doctor or factory worker. Everyone must equally persevere to work hard in order to make a living and survive in such a competitive society. Giving funds to only artists, therefore, can create discrimination against employees from other occupations, which causes chagrin and dissatisfaction among residents, as well as compromises the national economy and solidarity.
In conclusion, notwithstanding a number of merits provided by funding artists, I believe artists should not be provided with money from politicians because of the importance of other fields and the integrity for other jobs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 620, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'docks'' or 'dock's'?
Suggestion: docks'; dock's
...veral new statues and sculptures in the docks area of the city. Beside generating a m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, firstly, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17511520737 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9082393986 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3245451631 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.375 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.125 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243662583993 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747586578468 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538526290578 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14851057829 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521021171564 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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