Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
this is a controversial topic, even though, I think that investment on the computer technology is as important as spending money on other basic needs of the people. I will explain and illustrate this issue in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, computer and its related technology is nowadays are widely used in almost all areas of professions. So investment on computer technology is investment on the development of on the country and the nation. it can facilitate development of the people capacity to find a proper job and feed themselves. For example, a person who works in a factory, usually run into complex mechanical issues. if s/he knows how to use computer technnology, he would be more competent in his work.
Secondly, all people should participate in schools. education nowadays are dependent on computer and computer technolgy. if the students are familiar with computer technology, they would be able to complete the education and enter the world of professions successfully.
Thirdly, the daily life in modern era is dependent on computer technolgy. invesment on this technolgy will help people have a relatively easy life and easily solve daily life issues. For instance, if one want to buy an ticket he can do it from home through his/her mobile phone or a computer. if the person is not familiar with this technology s/he would not be able to do it. this person should go to a travel agency and pay further costs for getting a ticket.
Therefore, investment on computer technology is more important than spending on the basic needs. because basic needs would be supplied through a society equiped with computer technolgy. because every body needs to get familiar with this technology in school, for their work and profession and finaly be familiar with it for the daily life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09395973154 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86610972027 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520134228188 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.507322799 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3333333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5555555556 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72222222222 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266730256022 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808348013063 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489919249817 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149249051072 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249099403547 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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