some yound adults want independence from their parents
In this fast-paced world, many youths want to be independent from their parents and many also seek to live with their parents even after getting job and getting engaged. I am from India where the most of the families and their children usually live together rather than their son/daughther living independently from his/her parents. Still I beleive the opinion that a young adult should be independent from his/her parents.
Firstly, that young adult person will know his/her responsibilies. As they are living away from their parents,he/she has to take care of everything. Everything includes daily household chores, making of meal, paying the bills, etc. They have to earn by themselves, spend money on their respective expenses, and also make the savings for their future on their own. This will allow a person to be developed more, making him/her more responsible and take care of their things by their own rather than being dependent on someone's assitance.
Secondly, if a person is living independently from their parents, they will be responsible or accountable for their actions. What I meant to say is if any action is performed by that person, it will be accountable to that person only. For example, if there is a student who is performing some research in a laboratory during his/her post-graduate course and an accident occurs because of him/her or may be due to his/her misbehaviour, the respective student is resticated for a week. Then here the student will bear the consquences. There will be no interference from their parents by paying for the expenses of the damage caused in the laboratory or having a visit to the college to meet the respective faculty on behalf of his/her child for an apology. No, that does not work here. The student will be more attentive and awareful of their surroundings so that they do not make any mistake for which they might have to suffer later.
To summarise, if a person is living independently, they will become more responsible, accountable and awareful of their actions. Because they know that there is no one to support them if any trouble is caused. This does not mean that they are in complete isolation from their parents. Obviously, as their child, parents will intervene if any serious issue has occured. So to restate my opinion, I believe that the young adult should try to practice to be more independent from their parents and simulataneously, the parents should also agree with their childrens' decision as soon as they reach an appropriate age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Still,
...ing independently from his/her parents. Still I beleive the opinion that a young adul...
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Line 3, column 110, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , he
... they are living away from their parents,he/she has to take care of everything. Eve...
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Line 7, column 441, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'practice being'.
Suggestion: practice being
...ieve that the young adult should try to practice to be more independent from their parents and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, as to, for example, i mean
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98812351544 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82435687893 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472684085511 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2825219781 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.05 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310696127412 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102059953869 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089623133483 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224927524717 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0948902985762 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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