Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time. Which of these solutions do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Parents and teachers plays an important role in our lives. They are the one's who make us realize our mistakes and guide us in the righteous paths which can enhance our lives. Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible, whereas, other's I am sure, prefer to live with their families for a longer time. In my opinion, I prefer the later for two reasons which I will mention in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, parents can perceive things more objectively than young adults. Most of the young adults when decided to do a thing, they loose their sight of balance. Infact, they will be inclined to the positives and doesn't even think that whether the task have any negatives. In contrast, parents will provide us with the other side as well, so that, we can decide in a better way. For instance, very long ago, I want to become a cricketer as I was fond of cricket. Then I thought of neglecting my studies and utilize that time to practice so that I can enhance my technique and skills. As my father noticed my behavioral change, he called me and explained about what probability does a player have in cricket to play international cricket in our country. Moreover, he made me aware of possible injuries, the fitness I should maintain, the amount of practice I had to do while in the zeal of sustaining a place in the team and many more. This objective explanation about my choice made me feel that, I probably chose wrong side and from then on I concentrated on studies and excelled in them.
Further, parents possess greater social experience which can help young adults lead a better life in future. Young adults, Who were new to various tasks, generally have confusion about what to have, why to choose, which are beneficial and many more. In contrast, parents who passed the same age of their kids, are well aware of the problems their kids face and may know the probable solutions to avoid such risks. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. When I am about to pursue my undergraduation, I was stuck in a puzzled stage about what major I should choose, where to study, job prospective issues and many more. As, I belong to India, where people irrespective of their age live with their families for most of the time, came handy. My father, who has a great knowledge and experience regarding education stuff, helped me by providing realistic ideas and strengths of the each universities, my probability of admission into that university and many more, So that, I made the best possible decision and joined in University college of Kakinada and placed in a job.
In conclusion, it's better that young people must prefer to live with their families for a longer time because parents make us perceive things more objectively and their experience can help us enhancing our lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...can enhance our lives. Some young adults want independence from their parents as ...
^^
Line 2, column 137, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...adults when decided to do a thing, they loose their sight of balance. Infact, they wi...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 218, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...y will be inclined to the positives and doesnt even think that whether the task have a...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1019, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...ice made me feel that, I probably chose wrong side and from then on I concentrated on...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...an help young adults lead a better life in future. Young adults, Who were new to various ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 193, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to enhance' or 'enhance'.
Suggestion: to enhance; enhance
...tively and their experience can help us enhancing our lives.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, well, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2337.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71169354839 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61672656232 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510080645161 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.602918859 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.285714286 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.619047619 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327459693918 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997315487092 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125372538219 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234187372042 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845878385371 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.