Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
۱٫ Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
۲٫ Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples
Students often have hectic days during semesters. They are engaged in different activities related to their classes, exams and research projects. Therefore, the free time between the university semesters is a golden time for having this chance to participate in other activities. Some people believe that they should involve in activities related to routine life that can be useful for the other citizens, while the others including me have a different notion. I firmly believe that students should take part in a course which has not any connection with their field of study. I hold this view based on two main reasons. Not only can they detect common aspects of different majors, but also it will be possible to be aware of their abilities in other fields. In what follows, the most outstanding reasons will be scrutinized to clarify the discussion.
The first aspect to point out is that the students will be able to find common aspects of different majors. When they are exposed to some concepts of another major, a lot of information will emerge. Consequently, it gives them a deep sight to extract what aspects of the majors that can have practical applications in their own main major. However, they may appear completely different at the first glance; gradually common fields will be detectable for the students. There is no doubt that this process has a profound effect on their performance. For instance, when I was a mechanical engineering student at the University of Tehran, the graduation office published an announcement about some available courses for engineering students during the summer vacation. These courses were related to history and the role of ancient people in human beings' development. I could gain invaluable information about the ancient people's activities on the industrial revolution. Had not I participated in these courses, I would not have had such information about common efforts throughout the history.
A further more significant point is that, the students will be able to recognize their talents in other fields. Obviously, when they just focus on their main major all the time, they can not be aware about the other abilities in other fields. Therefore, during these classes in unrelated courses to their own major, they have this golden chance. Let's consider my own personal experience as an example. There was a time that I was dealing with biology subjects at the university. Once I participated in a course related to playing musical instruments, I found out that I have a remarkable ability in playing the piano. This leads me to pursue my interest in playing piano seriously after graduation as a biologist. Last year when I was chosen as the best pianist in the country, I remember the golden courses which I had been taken when I was a biology student. Admittedly, it motivates me and paves the way towards the success.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementioned reasons it seems that asking the students to participate in courses which are different from their main major can be considered as a rational method to enhance the abilities of the students in the near future. They will understand about common aspects of different majors. Moreover, they will be aware of their abilities in other majors. That's why it is highly recommended for all the educational systems to pay special attention to this matter.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...and the role of ancient people in human beings development. I could gain invaluable in...
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...wn major, they have this golden chance. Lets consider my own personal experience as ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...are of their abilities in other majors. Thats why it is highly recommended for all th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, in brief, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2820.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 560.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03571428571 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.8645985582 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78251647959 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467857142857 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 886.5 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0535864733 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196874009221 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0530925783732 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628936809416 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136482623882 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0222712396839 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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