Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
۱٫ Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of study (For example, a student majoring in engineering may take course in fine arts or social science.)
۲٫ Students must volunteer to work in the university’s city or their hometowns to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town. (For example, students may help local primary school children with their homework.) Which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university? Why? Give detailed examples and reasons. Use your OWN words, do NOT use memorized examples
Free time between semesters can be assumed as a golden opportunity for students to enhance their skills. They are not involved with their majors of study during this time. Some people believe that, it should be mandatory for students to participate in public activities regardless to their major. Others, including me, have a different viewpoint.I firmly believe that students should take part in courses which are different from their own main major. Not only common aspects between majors can be detected by students, but also this method leads them to have comprehensive knowledge in a variety of subjects. Furthermore, students will be able to discover their hidden abilities. The most outstanding reasons are scrutinized in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, students realize some issues that may have common characteristics and applications. However, they belong to completely different majors. These common features help them to develop their knowledge in a variety of subjects. In fact, it allows them to have a deep insight in different circumstances. For instance, when I was a mechanical engineering student, I decided to register for history classes between the semesters. These classes were held at our university and different groups of students had been registered. I noticed to the lectures about the prominent role of ancient people in civilization. It was amazing. Since I have never had information about their responsibility to the invention of the wind turbine as a source of energy. The application of wind energy is a common issue between historian contents and mechanical engineering ones. Had not I participated in this class, I would not have had such level of knowledge about ancient people.
A furthermore significant point is that students are not often aware of their abilities in other fields. Therefore, some talented students may not find this chance to present their abilities. Needless to say that participation in different courses let them to explore the hidden aspects of their abilities. Let's consider my friend's experience as an example. There was a time that the university managers ask us to choose a course for the spare time between semesters. My friend as a biology student chose the music class. "It has been so far the happiest class, I have ever seen. I learned a lot about playing piano. As a result, I found myself as a professional piano player. In fact, I recognized my talent in this way by participating in a class different from my own major."; my friend explained about his experience. That is why taking different classes can be useful for students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2210.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00158758454 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527058823529 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3827515312 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2068965517 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6551724138 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.37931034483 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236263624085 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602565508085 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539140698969 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167484921554 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176266756676 0.0645574589148 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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