taking a year off before going to university
Nowadays, education plays a pivotal role in people's lives. Perhaps no subject in the world is as likely to cause so much controversy as how people should pursue their further education does. An issue in dispute is that whether students, after completing highschool should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university or it's better for them to go to university immediately. Some people advocate that students have to start going to university as soon as they can, while opponents suggest that taking a year off brings many advantages to the student. In my opinion, taking at least a year off to work and travel is so beneficial for students for two reasons.
First and foremost, taking a year off gives the students a wonderful opportunity to broaden their horizon. As we all know, Teenagers that leave highschool hve limited exprience and knowledge about both themselves and the world. So, being involved in adventures like having a new work or travel somewhere will provide them with great conditions that know themselves and the life better. For example, I grew up in family that praised science. My father was a physics professor and my mother was a chemist. Naturally, they advised me to pursue science for my further studies after graduating from highschool but I wasn't sure what to do. So, I took of a year and traveled to a country in Middleeast to see how other people view the world. Therefore, I went to Iran and I was fascinated by the cultural diffrence between our societies. After a year, I've reached the conclusion that my dream job is to study cultural diffrences among people of the world. therefore, I pursued my further studies in the field of sociology. As a summary traveling aided me to find my way through life. That's why I'm positive that taking a year off is a good desicion for students.
Secondly, not going to university immedietly and work instead supply you with valuable expriences that increase the likelyhood of gaining career success in future. For instance, my grandfather worked in a resturant when he ended highschool. As a result of encountering cooks he decided to test the expreience of cooking. After a while, it turned out that he had a special talent in designing dishes that tasted new. He also found some friends that would help him with his cooking. After two years of learning the cooking skill, he opened his own resturant and gathered his crew and he became so successful in his career. Consequently, he never went to university because he had found his true calling. That's why I aver that people should know themselves and their talents better by giving themselves more time with taking a year off before going to university.
From what has been discussed above one can reach a conclusion that taking at least a year from university would provide us with many benefits such as broadening our horizon and gathering exprience that will help us in our future career success. Finally, I suggest parents to support their children to travel and work before going to universities by encouraging them and giving them financial aids for exploring life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, at least, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2605.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84200743494 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70395248097 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514869888476 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.554669759 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4814814815 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9259259259 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81481481481 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333767527486 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818775359084 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111737383494 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222244311154 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0941220981832 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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