Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed
In today's technology oriented world, television, social media, has tremendous impact on current as well as previous generation. Researchers have found that people spent approximately 6-7 hours in front of television. Especially, the advertisement has greater influence on people. I personally feel that, television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed. I feel in this way for two reason, which I will explore in this essay.
Firstly, as I mentioned earlier that television has profound and long-lasting effect on people of every age-group. It is so much that, toddler do not prefer to eat, if they are not in front of television. The young children directed advertisement theme or even them as child artist can provoke unhealthy, negative action in society. For example, in advertisement of automatic car. It shows a child of age 11 driving a car roughly. This was having so much negative influence on children, that some of them drive without the awareness of their parents. This news was spread like fire, and after few days it was banned.
Secondly, considering a child as artist in such a small age can cause lot of collateral damage. They tend to divert themselves from education toward fashion and film industry. When they started to earn money from small age, it make them indiscipline and even some of them get involved in illegal activities. For instance, a boy from my neighborhood has been offered a side character in one of the famous clothing advertisement. He was in eight standard when it was offered, after that he quitted the study and continue to pursue as artist. It's been almost 10 years, when I last saw him.
It is truly said, that television is an "idiot box". People often get lost in the fantasy world, however, it becomes too late when they realizes the difference. So, because of above mentioned reason, I strongly oppose the idea that television advertising should be directed toward young children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, even so, for example, for instance, i feel, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06461538462 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89853013148 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596923076923 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9245637044 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.380952381 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4761904762 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28359082706 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828067958829 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168783346868 0.0737576698707 229% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193068505228 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123996948868 0.0645574589148 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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