Television advertising towards younger children should not be allowed. Do you agree or disagree?
Advertising always pulled the public to buy the new product because of the fancy shows they watch on television. The same goes the younger kids because they show fancy toys on the television. In my opinion, TV has many benefits and drawback for the younger kids.
When a baby is born television is the first attraction for the kids, however, as good parents we don't allow the babies to watch television. I believe it's the movies who pull children to watch television. For instance, my five-year-old kid was fascinated by the car shows on the TV. He was happy because he loves Lightning McQueen car. After some days the movie "Cars" was shown a television. There were benefits because in the movie he came to know what cars are about and the name of the character in that movie. At the same time, he also started watching movies on the big screen which was an advantage for me as a parent because there is always a struggle to sit in the theater.
On the contrary, there are many drawbacks on advertisement too. The disadvantage is that television makes a child fascinated with many toys which are very expensive for a middle-class family to afford. For example, my two-year-old has a fascination with Barbies. When I went to the store she asked for a Barbie doll house which was $80. Though there were many small and big version of Barbie toys she wanted the bigger version. The reason for the bigger version is that she saw it in the advertisement.
In conclusion, I can say that we cannot avoid advertisement in between our shows because we have to deal with it. The advertising industry is smart in pulling kids, and the younger generation to buy toys from stores.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 297.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6734006734 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76156681787 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525252525253 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8825487309 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.1111111111 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44444444444 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0701707562192 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261799651649 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293683820792 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0526475836593 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263282472153 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 86.8835125448 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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