TPO-31- Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Happiness is a very important aspect of our lives because if we want to enjoy our lives we have to be happy. Some thinks that people in past were more happy than people living in current time because the world is changing very fast now. If you ask me I would say people in the current time are much more satisfied with their lives for few reasons which I explain them in this article.
First, we have to ask ourselves that how we define happiness? In my view, the type of happiness of the current people are very different from people living in past. For example, people in past used to sing songs, climb mountains or get together and visit each other to spend their free time, but now people spend their free time very different because the type of habits and entertainments devices have changed a lot, for example, traveling to other countries by airplane very quickly; and seeing different pictures and reading different funny stories in our mobile phone can be very satisfying and fun.
Second, today people have to work less because the world have become automated and everything is fast and works are done without any humans have to do the job. In past, humans were responsible for doing their jobs and they need a lot of effort and energy to complete their tasks, but electricity has made jobs easier because machines are replacing the humans' hands and they can do the hard work instead of us; just we have to program them at first, so these new changes and new technologies can lead up to more happiness.
Third, in old times people did not have access to internet or electronic devices like smart phones, so they had a lot less knowledge than a person living in current time that uses these devices. I think someone is happy which knows a lot about everything and can answer any question that may be asked, therefore we can search any information quickly on internet and know the answers. This way we can gather and learn more knowledge to fix our problems and needs.
Based on the three reason I mentioned above, people living in the present time are much more happier than those who lived in past because the new fast world has given us opportunities like working less and gaining more knowledge. If we define happiness in these new opportunities, certainly the current world can be very beautiful and promising for us, so It is better to thanks for these gifts and the easy life we have now.
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Essay evaluation report
the type of happiness of the current people are very different
the type ...is very different
flaws:
No. of Words: 431 while No. of Different Words: 206 //it means it has duplicated content. for example:
the type of happiness of the current people are very different from people living in past. For example, people in past used to sing songs, climb mountains or get together and visit each other to spend their free time, but now people spend their free time very different because the type of habits and entertainments devices have changed a lot, for example, traveling to other countries by airplane very quickly; and seeing different pictures and reading different funny stories in our mobile phone can be very satisfying and fun.
some contents are duplicated. We are expecting:
No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 1937 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.494 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.301 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.558 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.411 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.651 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.226 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Happiness is a very important aspect of ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich I explain them in this article. First, we have to ask ourselves that how...
^^^
Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...e are very different from people living in past. For example, people in past used to si...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...t funny stories in our mobile phone can be very satisfying and fun. Second, today people hav...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hone can be very satisfying and fun. Second, today people have to work less b...
^^^
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'In the past'?
Suggestion: In the past
... without any humans have to do the job. In past, humans were responsible for doing thei...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ogies can lead up to more happiness. Third, in old times people did not have ...
^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ledge to fix our problems and needs. Based on the three reason I mentioned ab...
^^^^
Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...ple living in the present time are much more happier than those who lived in past because th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, third, for example, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61020881671 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34581666379 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496519721578 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => OK
Sentence length SD: 104.591909131 48.9658058833 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 152.846153846 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1538461538 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249561621919 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105443387826 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764581079923 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155227050885 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722268777366 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.