TPO 5
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
I am of the opinion that individuals are devoting their time on unnecessary things to gratify their needs. I feel this way for several main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, today's world is developing rapidly, which makes people's life condition more conducive. Since individuals are using suitable things such as car and smartphone and living in comfortable accommodation. Therefore, they can save time by using these new things, which provides additional time that can be spent on enjoyable things. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Before I buy smartphone and laptop, going to library and reading books was significant matter to get informed. On the other hand, I am able to search anything from the internet thanks to those devices, which gives me extra time. For this reason, I can spend time on the things I like such as communicating and hanging out with my friends.
Secondly, there are sufficient amount of place at which civilians can fulfill their own need such as movie theater, coffee shop and gaming places thanks to the commercialization. Thanks to those new things which will satisfy individuals' need, they can take advantage on convenient environments to do satisfactory matters. For instance, few years ago, there was not enough locations where multitude stop by during their leisure. Thereby, they were tend to stay in their work or school even if they have free time. On the other hand, there are many things public are capable of doing nowadays. For this reason, quantity of duration they spend on pleasurable things have increased vastly.
Finally, individual's attitude is being changed in light of aspect of predominant body of civilians. Even though some people wants to perform necessary things, their friends or family heavily influence their choice because they want to be together. For example, my friends always ask me to go out whenever I study the subjects related to my lesson, thus time I devote for important things have declined in quantity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 32, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'amounts'?
Suggestion: amounts
...nds. Secondly, there are sufficient amount of place at which civilians can fulfill...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...uring their leisure. Thereby, they were tend to stay in their work or school even if...
^^^^
Line 7, column 416, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rtant things have declined in quantity.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09850746269 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74687533857 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611940298507 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.030077515 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8888888889 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6111111111 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213087324571 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637572961949 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620975343513 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113577045308 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637058287244 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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