Tpo51- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
movies and television are one of the most critical part of our modern society. Needless to say that people spend most of their time in front of television normally. Some people may find for television more positive impact than negative ones whereas others could take the revers. Even tough, television has positive effects on young people since they could learn various sience on them. Nevertheless, I firmly of the believe that its negative consequence are infinitely exceed. The following reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.
The first fact that holds me this concept is that action scens which increase warn behavior for young people. It can be seen, every where people are mostly vaiolence they were learn these behaviors from television movies and learn to kill and harm to people. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, a theif came to our company and try to rubbering us as the West action movies he has shotgun guns and mask on his face; so, we only give him as money as want. After a while, police busted him and he said that he learn this behavior from Werstern movie and saw many of them in order to made perfect rubb. Thus, it can be seen, if this negative influence of television could not happen or a young theif did not know such a things, he could not have slef confidence to rubbering with guns.
Another reason is that unsuitable advertising program increase wrong feeling on people to persuade them to buy more products which they did not need. I read several articles about the varios ways to increase costumer for our products at Iranian science journal three years ago. They analyze the various impacts of advertising program on human life; so, the assume that the most crucial way is advertising in television with use of beautiful woman. On of the articles estimates that approximately 40 percent increase occur on selling with one perfect advertise. I can remember my personal experience when I was studying power electronics at Sharif university about ten years ago. I was a young and really interest to increase my college mark as my sience. But, when I was alone I watched more and more television and it advertising programs had considerable negative effects on my life and income since I purchased more products which I did not need. Therefore, it can seems reasonable to assume from this experiences that television could have many negative consequent for young people.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept, television and movies have more negative impacts on human life. Not also, becuase of they learn to young people how easy to use more from guns, but also their adverisming program could have distruction impacts on young people. Every people should search for his interest and oponion about televison effects on himself life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2390.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 485.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92783505155 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58066092686 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503092783505 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6762411469 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.636363636 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238549977733 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732503961647 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486418740417 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16332115519 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521767859369 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.