A university should focus more on its facilities such as libraries computers or laboratory rather than on hiring famous teachers

The development of the society have unleashed a series of changes in many aspects, one of which is education. Universities receive more and more funding which can be used to improve the campus, leading to the question about what should schools focus to improve themselves. Some people think that university should hire more famous teachers. However, in my perspective, I think that university should focus on its facilities.

First of all, improving the facilities on campus could be beneficial for teaching of the university. Good education is not only should have a good teacher, but also should have good environment. If university improve the facilities that been used to teaching, such as advanced labrotary laboratory for science teachers, big gym for sport teachers and library with a lot of book for reading teachers, the teacher can lead their student do some experiments, participate participate some sports and do their reaserches researches. The teacher can teach students more knowledge on class. What’s more, after the class, students could use these facilities to reviews the knowledge from the lecture. To illustrate, they can use the powerful computer to search some information on line, find relative books in the library and do some experiments to verify the truth of the textbook knowledge. Finally, the knowledge they learn could consolidate after class.

On the top of that, those facilities could help students to pursue their academic goal and release their stress. After learning some advanced professional knowledge, students could come up with some interesting ideas which should be verified by well organized experiments. A university with various facilities could help students finish their experiments perfectly. For instance, the library could provide lots of paper and reference for students to learn enough background knowledge, laboratory could provide a full equipped environment and computers could speed up the calculation and data visual process. Therefore, students could reach a higher academic goal. Moreover, after a long time study, student could feel tired and stressful. They could want to do something interests them, such as reading interesting book at library and playing sports in the gym. Therefore, the stress from the study could quickly be eliminated.

To sum up, university should spare more effect to improve its facilities on the grands that it could not only beneficial for teaching but also make students’ live better on campus.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun book seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of books'.
Suggestion: a lot of books
...gym for sport teachers and library with a lot of book for reading teachers, the teacher can l...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 457, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: participate
...lead their student do some experiments, participate participate some sports and do their reaserches res...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, such as, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 9.8082437276 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43187660668 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82525946622 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516709511568 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7861904745 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.65 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251674319739 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0801913224753 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075149179853 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174939136322 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684132229335 0.0645574589148 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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