Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what
they already know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Although repetition on one area makes one’s skill be perfect and outstanding, I believe that to go to brand new fields and to take risks are always outweighs practicing old skills. The reasons is that creative and ambition are indispensable qualities being successful people. In addition, to open a new door to a new area give people more opportunities to be successful. Hence, I agree with this statement that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing they already do very well.
First of all, being creative and ambition invoke people be curiousness about the world. They always be hungry and try new things in their life. In the other word, their lifestyle is-- stay hungry and stay foolish which it is a famous maxim for Steven Jobs. So, take Jobs as an example, as we all know, Steven Jobs developed the Mac 2 computer when he was young. After kicking out by Apple company, he started a new adventure in the new fields where is joining animation company-- Pixar. Amazing person did amazing things, Jobs also made the Pixar very popular in the world and Apple was in the dilemma as the same time so that they have to invite Jobs back to Apple company to help them to spend this hard time. He developed the iphone4 and ipad series when he came back and Apple went through this difficult time. If Jobs just focus on the old skills, the Pixar may not be popular and Apple company couldn’t spend such hard time without Jobs.
Second, going to another field can make more chance for people to be renowned people. Sometimes in a brand new field people will found their brand new talent, which bring him more opportunities to be successful. For instance, Kendrick Lamar who is the one of my favorite rappers. He wanted to be a professional basketball player when he was in high school. However, one day, a teacher found his ode talent which invoke him to be rapper. He used his special rhyme to conquer many hip-pop fans. Even Obama paged him in 2015! And now, he became the first rapper to win the PUREZ prize. If he choose to be a basketball player and he didn’t open the new door to enter the hip-pop world, he may not as success as now. People will also lose a talented rapper.
In a conclusion, based on the above reasons, I think that without being creative and ambition people will never be successful. Also, if people have no courage to enter a brand new field, they will lose many chances to be successful. Therefore, I agree with that successful people would like to take risks and try new things rather than focus on the same old things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...ighs practicing old skills. The reasons is that creative and ambition are indispen...
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Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be always
...le be curiousness about the world. They always be hungry and try new things in their life...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'amaze'
Suggestion: amaze
...ion company-- Pixar. Amazing person did amazing things, Jobs also made the Pixar very p...
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Line 5, column 590, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'chooses'.
Suggestion: chooses
...st rapper to win the PUREZ prize. If he choose to be a basketball player and he didn&a...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60129310345 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41553873917 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491379310345 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0385014358 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.9583333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.79166666667 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180026885674 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607895604894 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12127851142 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149932561982 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12500445736 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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