Why today rules are appropriate for young people
A rule is a term that refers to official norms that members of societies should follow. Perhaps no subject in the world is as likely to cause so much controversy as the right limits of rules does. An issue in dispute is that whether today rules are too restrict to young people. Some experts advocate that nowadays rules are too tight for young peole to obey, While opponents suggest that they are appropriate. In my opinion, the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are not too strict for two reasons.
First and foremost, rules and regulations are the very foundation that new societies are built upon. Without them there will be chaos everywhere. Therefore, in order to provide a diciplined enviroment for humans to live toggether laws, rules, rubrics, protocols and regulations are essential. For example, my gradfather born in agricultural Iran before the modern reformations took place. In that society there were no laws to protect children from working. So, my when my grandfather was as least as six years old he had to help with the works of their farm like cultivating wheat, harvesting cereal crops, feeding livestocks, cleaning barn and bringing water from the wells. All these energy and time consuming activities prevented him from pursuing his education. In contrast, in modern Iran we have work laws that prevent children to work under age of sixteen and there are also official legistations about mandatory education till finishing highschool. Therefore, it is obvious that new rules works in favor of young people, particularly children. That is why I advocate the idea that The rules that societies today expect young people is for their own welfare and are not too strict.
Second, as time passes, good rules are presereved and bad one are eliminated through the exprience of trial and error. Take the example of voting as an instance. When my grandfather was starting adulthood, the government of Iran encated some laws that gave the right of voting to men above the age of eighteen. However, women were prohibited to vote due to the impact of religion on the representitives of congress that legislated laws. In Islamic perspective women tend to be inferior to men that is why we had no women prophets. But as time passed, twenty years later, when Iranian people were exposed to western societies they were informed how useful women could be in terms of social and economical gains. As a result rules were modifies such that they allowed women to vote. To sum up, rules are nor engraved in stones and they can me refined and reintroduced. Consequently if a rule is to sever on young people there are legitimate ways to change them into more efficient rules.
From what has beeen discussed above, one can reach a conclusion that due to the essentiality of laws and rules for establishing a society and the fact that regulations can be modified and revised, the rules that societies today expect young people to follow are neccessary. Moreover, in the case of harsh rules people can alter those rules because legistation system is open to transformation. Finally, i suggest governments to conduct yearly surveys on how ypung people see the rules. Therefore, regimes have more information about which rules are causing tention in youngs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2746.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 552.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97463768116 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69546711224 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527173913043 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 873.9 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7191089614 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0714285714 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82142857143 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357706086964 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932025751058 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107857113494 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240197618546 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0786446194404 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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