The Positive Effect of Movies and Television on Young People
Perhaps no subject in the world is as likely to cause so much controversy as debate on the impact of media on behaviour of young people does. An issue in dispute is that wheteher movies and television programs have positive effect on society. Some poeple advocate that media negatively affects the young group, while opponents suggest vice versa. In my opinion movies and television have more positive effects on the way young people behave for two reasons.
First and foremost, media facilitate the flow of information, so, it provides means of conveying important ideas, valuable norms, and essential value to the young people. For example, I was born in Iran. A country in middle east with a totalitearn religious regime which systematically censors the truth about its governace and phenomenons all over the world. for instance there is nothing in official science books about the theory of evolution because in Islam the emergencee thoery is supported, so the evolution theory which states humans are decendants of other animals are undermined, and the thory that hummans were brought to earth due to their misbehaviour in heavons for eaing the prohibited fruit is advocated. Howeve, I saw a documentary on darwin and his earth shaking book The Origind of Species and it changed my whole view on how life change through time. I've learned a great deal about mechanism of natural selection and how this notion is an alternative to the justification that we have a intelligence creator called God. Therefore, having access to media and television programs can inform pepole about many valuable information about the science, technology, and the world and change their perspectice by casting light on areas that they never heard of it before. That's why I endorse the fact that media have an overall positive effect on young people.
Second, Movies and television provide cultural material for large sum of people with neligible cost. Before their invention only a few rich and elite people had the access to arts or science like plays, books, sculptures, poems and etc. In contrast, nowdays we can see abundant programrams that supply us with arts like variety of kinds of movies and musics that are played through television programs. For instance, there is a program in our national tv about iranian music that broadcasts every friday. So, I tend to learn a great deal about out cultural legacy, when our music was originated, what kind of diffrent musics are available in Iran, what is the diffrence between Iranian music and western music, how the educaton of music changed over the course of time, what were the factors that inhibit the growth of music in Iran, how the conflict between Islam and music faded away and etc. In conclusion, these examples obviously illustrate how movies and television programs can induce possitive effects on the mind and behaviour of people, young ones included.
From what has been discussed above, one can reach a conclusion that due to the facilitating impact of media on flow of information and the fact that movies and tv programs provide cultural material for the mass, the positive effect of them outweigh their negative impacts. Finally, I suggest governments should introduce incentives to promote high quality programs for the people of society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2761.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0847145488 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62509180285 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 212.727598566 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532228360958 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 876.6 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.5336506722 48.9658058833 179% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.05 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.15 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309649979119 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106492921046 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131727370289 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222400891371 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154867040007 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 86.8835125448 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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