You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
Money is one of the most important things which helps us purchase whatever we like.It is very to difficult to make a decision on which one i should buy between a house or a business.If i have got into the point where i have enough money and may be able to buy either a house or a business,I would like to buy a business rather a house.Here are the following reasons why i have chose a house to purchase.
first of all,Buying a business is like a challenges and I really enjoy facing the challenges and it can help widen our intellectual capacity and to gain new experiences related to a business.If we invest in a business and use the kind of a business with our honesty and intelligence,we may earn double money and running a successful business can lead me to be strong and patient.I would like to talk this from my experiences.Once a successful business man said that His father gave him some moneys and suggested him to use the money to buy a car for himself but he neglected what his father and he thought that having a car didn't make him happy.One day,he had a dream of running a successful business and helping people and decided to open a business with the money and it helped him gain new experiences and it helped lead him to be famous and patient.
Secondly,not only the owner of a business,it also helps change other people's life.For example,if i open a business,it will helps hire poor people and provides employment opportunities to many people.We can give the profitable moneys if we get a lot of profits from this business.if we open a business,we must pay taxes to our authority and these taxes may be gathered and utilize these taxes collected from business to help increase the developments in our community.
In conclusion,it is better to buy a business rather than a house.A business will help fulfill people's wishes and hire many people and it may help me learn new experiences from a business
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61224489796 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88441202375 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475218658892 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 85.0 20.1344086022 422% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 240.641200753 48.9658058833 491% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 395.5 100.406767564 394% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 85.75 20.6045352989 416% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 26.5 5.45110844103 486% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.5376344086 488% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172194281249 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122444050355 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12192891732 0.0737576698707 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122444050355 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12192891732 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 43.2 11.7677419355 367% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -6.34 58.1214874552 -11% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 6.10430107527 260% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 35.3 10.1575268817 348% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.64 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.52 8.01818996416 131% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.002688172 270% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 36.0 10.0537634409 358% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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