You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
f I had enough money to buy either a house or a business, I would choose purchase a business in order to make my dream become true: to be a businesswoman. By doing business, I could earn more money to afford not only my accommodation but also other needs.
When I was a young, I would have a dream of becoming a businessman. Unlike many friends of mine who decided to study engineering, construction or literature etc, I decided to study economics. Having enough money to purchase and run a business is the way that makes my dream become true and bring all knowledge I have learnt in the university into practice.
Although it’s said that doing business is risky because it may success or fail. You may earn a lot of money but you may lose your fortune in the blink of an eye. However, I believe that I can successfully run my own business with my qualification, my experience and especially my management skills. With the money earning from my successful business, I could rent a house which is more economical than to buy a house while still have a certain amount of money put aside for other necessities such as higher qualification or to provide financial support to my friends or relatives in their education or career.
Everyone has his own dream. As my dream is to become a businessman, I would buy a business if I had enough money. By doing business, I would have a chance to earn more money which would financially support me in obtaining some targets.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: F
f I had enough money to buy either a hous...
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Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to purchase'
Suggestion: to purchase
...r a house or a business, I would choose purchase a business in order to make my dream be...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1212.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59090909091 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89163798701 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530303030303 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9129344578 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281316384291 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106215982222 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924166169691 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185240454118 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504141463882 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 86.8835125448 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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