For young people, some people claim that they make great effort to devote sufficient time to assisting their communities.
Helping with each other, definitely, is a kind of virtue which is advocated by all the people in our society. For young people, some people claim that they make great effort to devote sufficient time to assisting their communities. In my view, young people go to communities and help them rarely, since young people are busy working and have a weak relationship and little communication with their communities.
Admittedly, the main reason to assert that young people usually give a hand to their communities is that many organizations which consist of lots of young people often offer to visit the communities and do some public service activities. However, after considering the frequency of evevy individual, it is very rare.
Firstly, with the fast pace of social development, nowadays young people are very busy and have no time to take part in some activities which can provide platform for them to help their communities. Take my brother, Tom, as an example. He is a worker in Microsoft company. It is commonly known that a staff of a big company is inclined to be busy. It is not an overstatement that Tom has to work 12 hours every and usually work overnight. What is more bad is that the weekends is not an exception sometimes. Therefore, he has little free time to deal with other things which are not related to work. In a word, due to the busy work, it is impossible for young people to take time to help their communities.
Secondly, the tendency is that the relationship between young people and their communities is weaker and weaker, which results from that young people are more willing to stay at home instead of communities. As an internet survey estimated, at the free time, young people who want to stay at home account for 54%. As these people confessed, after high-intensity work, having a good rest time is more important for them and going outside is tiring and not worthwhile. Consequently, this social phenomenon determines that going to help communities is hard for young people.
In a nutshell, based on the reasons I stated above, I insist that young people do spend little time helping their communities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, kind of, in my view, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87912087912 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79780953531 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494505494505 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4653021272 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6666666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.444229107677 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14331348618 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.22435222541 0.0737576698707 304% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260075657021 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149541494516 0.0645574589148 232% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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