Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
Undoubtedly, my social life may have a positive effect on my happiness since I could relax and release my pressure from work. However, there are some others and perhaps more crucial ways to offer happiness to me. Therefore, I could hardly agree more with the statement that my job could have more effect on my happiness, the reasons would be illustrated as follow.
Initially, I would encounter more people and spend more time on my work. For one thing, I am more likely make new acquaintances during work so I will be happier. This is mainly because, during the work, I need to deal with a substantial amount of prickly issues with co-works from various sectors such as marketing, cost-control and accounting. People from different sectors must have different personalities. As a result, it is easy for me to find people who are in line with my own interest and characteristic. With more close friends, I could share my inner feelings with them so I will be much happier. On the contrary, there is relatively fewer people I will encounter during the social life and it is hard to find my best fellows. As a result, I will derive more happiness during work. For another, I spend more time in doing work than social life. For instance, I work 9 hours a day and only have 1 day to relax per week. During the weekends, I always be exhausted and prone to just stay at home. Hence, I almost have no time to get involved in any social activities. Obviously, my mood is closely related to the outcome of my daily work rather than social life. Hence, the work must have deeper influence on my happiness than social life. Therefore, only with the help of my job, can I derive a happy mood.
In addition, since a well-paid job enable me to have more financial budget to fulfill my material need and improve my living standard, I would more likely to be happy. To state it more clearly, when I get a higher promotion or successfully figure out a tricky business, my boss is likely to raise my salary and reward me. With more money, I am able to hire a more professional doctor and buy a new prohibitive roadster. Therefore, my living standard would be improved and my material need could be met, which are the main sources of my happiness. On the contrary, no matter how many social activities you got involved, there is little chance for you to earn money. It is hard for you to feel happy with your empty pocket. Accordingly, my job has more effect on my happiness.
In a nutshell, which I prefer depends on my own experiences, life-style and emotional concerns. To be frank, I prone to choose the idea that my job could have more effect on my happiness.
- Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does 85
- Universities should require every graduation student to take public speaking courses 85
- You have long been friend with someone If they do something that you don t like should you still be friends with him or her 70
- People should know events happening around the world even if they have little influence on their daily lives 87
- People should know events happening around the world even if they have little influence on their daily lives 87
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...ources of my happiness. On the contrary, no matter how many social activities you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, for one thing, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55857740586 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6658737325 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462343096234 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1562454085 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.7037037037 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7037037037 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206528992441 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702140136795 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584488275594 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134490164462 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0217950995257 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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