Your local government has just recently received a large donation from an anonymous donor to improve
the community. Almost everyone agrees that the money should be invested in building a new public
facility. Which of the following do you think your local government should build?
- Build a public library
- Build a public park
- Build a public pool
Some people believe that building public library and public pool is good for neighborhood but these are the facilities that are rarely used by anyone and not suitable for every age group. However, In my opinion, building a park can be a best way to improve the community because of the following reasons:
First of all, If there is a public park around a neighborhood then it will encourage people to focus on there fitness which will eventually lead towards healthy lifestyle. Drawing from my own exerience there is a public park just 1 block away from my home. There is a open gym facility, which includes all the basic equipments for a comprehensive workout. Since, this park is close to my home I get to visit daily to workout on my fitness.
Futhermore, public park have a large space where small functions can be organised with the permission of local muncipal corporation. I clearly remember when my family organised a birthday party for my younger brother, the guest list was huge and we cannot accomodate that many guests in our house and all the banquet halls were booked. We decided to book a small portion of the park and luckily we got permission to hold a party inside park. As a result, in emergency situations we can organise small parties in parks, also benefitting government as people have to pay rent for the acquired time period.
Finally, living in concrete jungle having no interaction with nature can be a great cause for several diseases. If there is a park in the vicinty of a negihborhood then plants will provide fresh oxygen which balances the oxygen and carbon di-oxide level in the surrounding area. Thus, park prolong the age of people living around and these people certainly do not have any lung related disease.
In conclusion, out of all the options public park can contribute omnidirectionally to community and enhance the lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...equipments for a comprehensive workout. Since, this park is close to my home I get to...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to community and enhance the lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, then, thus, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1553.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82298136646 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72433186406 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580745341615 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8189168588 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.461538462 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.53846153846 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110960084686 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041338221575 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391720403839 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0663960230568 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353255193116 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.