Both the lecture and the reading passage discuss the danger of glass on birds. While the reading state that there are many solutions to prevent injuries to birds. The lecture refutes this, by saying that these solutions not effective to prevent birds from glass injuries.
First of all, the reading passage claims that using one way glass that is transparent in only one direction. So, the birds will not see through a window , and will be like a barrier. The lecture argues that using this glass will be like mirrors that will reflect the sky or the trees photo, and will lead to further injuries.
In addition, the reading makes argument is that using colorful designs that enable people to see through the opening where there is not a paint. While, birds would see the strips and avoid trying fly with colorful painting. The lecture counter this point by saying birds will see this opening and fly through it. And the painting will darken the area on the people.
Lastly, the reading argues that by using the birds magnetic field to guide birds away from building. The lecture pointing this claims by saying that birds use their magnetic fields in the long distance like when they go from cold area to warm area. And they depend on their vision and the sun brightness for short distance.
Both the lecture and the reading passage discuss the danger of glass on birds. While the reading state that there are many solutions to prevent injuries to birds. The lecture refutes this, by saying that these solutions not effective to prevent birds from glass injuries.
First of all, the reading passage claims that using one way glass that is transparent in only one direction. So, the birds will not see through a window , and will be like a barrier. The lecture argues that using this glass will be like mirrors that will reflect the sky or the trees photo, and will lead to further injuries.
In addition, the reading makes argument is that using colorful designs that enable people to see through the opening where there is not a paint. While, birds would see the strips and avoid trying fly with colorful painting. The lecture counter this point by saying birds will see this opening and fly through it. And the painting will darken the area on the people.
Lastly, the reading argues that by using the birds magnetic field to guide birds away from building. The lecture pointing this claims by saying that birds use their magnetic fields in the long distance like when they go from cold area to warm area. And they depend on their vision and the sun brightness for short distance.
Comments
why my mark is very low ???
why my mark is very low ???
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e discuss the danger of glass on birds. While the reading state that there are many s...
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Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng that these solutions not effective to prevent birds from glass injuries. Fi...
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Line 3, column 153, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the birds will not see through a window , and will be like a barrier. The lecture...
^^
Line 3, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... like a barrier. The lecture argues that using this glass will be like mirrors th...
^^
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the reading makes argument is that using colorful designs that enable people to s...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, lastly, so, while, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1073.0 1373.03311258 78% => OK
No of words: 226.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74778761062 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.06275622035 2.5805825403 80% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 145.348785872 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 303.3 419.366225166 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4837233203 49.2860985944 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.5384615385 110.228320801 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3846153846 21.698381199 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 7.06452816374 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417254277782 0.272083759551 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173085534495 0.0996497079465 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.202313047394 0.0662205650399 306% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311635159042 0.162205337803 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.347872977121 0.0443174109184 785% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.3589403974 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 53.8541721854 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.0289183223 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.2367328918 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.42419426049 85% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 63.6247240618 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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