TPO42 Integrated Writing
The male professor in the lecture finds it will not work well in ways that reading passage give to protect birds from injuries. In other words, he casts doubt on what the reading passage states. And in the lecture, he uses three convincing points to support his idea.
To begin with, the author of the reading passage contends that we can use one-way glass so that birds can not see in from outside and will not try to pass the glass. The speaker, however, refutes that birds will misunderstand the sky and tree which reflect in glass as true, as a result, they will fly to the glass. Apparently, the idea of the reading passage is dubious.
Furthermore, contrary to the second ways the reading passage gives that we could add some colorful designs such as thin stripes and paints in the glass, the lecturer claims that only if the holes are small enough that birds will not try to fly through the opening holes, however, this will cause the room inside the building too dark, which differs from what the reading reveals.
Last but not least, the listening material confute the statement showed in the reading passage that we could install electromagnets to emit magnetic filed to guide the direction of birds away from building, by pointing out that birds use eye to determine their path when they are fly in short distance, thus, this idea would not work. Clearly, it is a third point which is in conflict with its counterpart in the reading.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...convincing points to support his idea. To begin with, the author of the reading...
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...dea of the reading passage is dubious. Furthermore, contrary to the second ways...
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...differs from what the reading reveals. Last but not least, the listening materi...
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...ement showed in the reading passage that we could install electromagnets to emit ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, third, thus, well, in short, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1192.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 256.0 270.72406181 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65625 5.08290768461 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28743542856 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5625 0.540411800872 104% => OK
syllable_count: 343.8 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 3.25607064018 184% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.000992059 49.2860985944 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 132.444444444 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 21.698381199 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.0 7.06452816374 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361740176096 0.272083759551 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133354355192 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120713465531 0.0662205650399 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217043510608 0.162205337803 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975524177298 0.0443174109184 220% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 53.8541721854 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.2367328918 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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