Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing." The advertisers hire people,buzzers,who personally promote (buzz) products to people
The article states that The advertisers hire people who promote goods to people they know or meet, and buzzers do not reveal that they're being paid to promote anything, as the result, buzzing has generated a lot of controversy, however, the lecturer, which he is a buzzer, states that the article is miss leading the readers, and refutes each of author's reasons.
First, the reading claims that buzzers don't tell their customer that they're praising a product, because they are paid for. The speaker refutes this point by saying that buzzers tell the truth to the customers, and those people who use the product know about the quality of the product so they become buzzers themselves.
Second, the article writes that, consumers listen to buzzers because they don't know what's going on, therefore, they don't ask too much question, and don't look at the product with a critical point of view. The speaker says, actually people ask a lot of questions about the price, the service and the length of the service they provide, otherwise they won't buy it.
Third, the reading says that, buzzing may have harmful effect on the social relationship and communication. The lecturer oposes this point by explaining that, if a company has low quality product won't be able to hire buzzers, so those companies, that have buzzers to advertise for them, are really goo companies.
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however, the lecturer, which he is a buzzer,
however, the lecturer, whom he is a buzzer,
however, the lecturer, who is a buzzer,
if a company has low quality product won't be able to hire buzzers,
if a company has low quality products, it won't be able to hire buzzers,
so those companies, that have buzzers to advertise for them, are really goo companies.
so those companies that have buzzers to advertise for them are really goo companies. //no commas before 'that'
Sentence: The lecturer oposes this point by explaining that, if a company has low quality product won't be able to hire buzzers, so those companies, that have buzzers to advertise for them, are really goo companies.
Error: oposes Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 7 12
No. of Words: 238 250
No. of Characters: 1106 1200
No. of Different Words: 121 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.928 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.647 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.323 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 62 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 24 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.908 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.452 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.76 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The article states that The advertisers ...
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Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...or meet, and buzzers do not reveal that theyre being paid to promote anything, as the ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., and refutes each of authors reasons. First, the reading claims that buzzers d...
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Line 2, column 43, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... First, the reading claims that buzzers dont tell their customer that theyre praisi...
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Line 2, column 72, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at buzzers dont tell their customer that theyre praising a product, because they ...
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Line 2, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
... buzzers dont tell their customer that theyre praising a product, because they are pa...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uct so they become buzzers themselves. Second, the article writes that, consume...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...onsumers listen to buzzers because they dont know whats going on, therefore, they do...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...isten to buzzers because they dont know whats going on, therefore, they dont ask too ...
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Line 3, column 120, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...nt know whats going on, therefore, they dont ask too much question, and dont look at...
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Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e, they dont ask too much question, and dont look at the product with a critical poi...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y provide, otherwise they wont buy it. Third, the reading says that, buzzing ma...
^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'third']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248091603053 0.261695866417 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.198473282443 0.158904122519 125% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0419847328244 0.0723426182421 58% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0267175572519 0.0435111971325 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0458015267176 0.0277247811725 165% => OK
Prepositions: 0.118320610687 0.128828473217 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0381679389313 0.0370669169778 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.40822472245 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0229007633588 0.0208969081088 110% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.129770992366 0.128158765124 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00381679389313 0.0158828679856 24% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0152671755725 0.0114777025283 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1372.0 1645.83664459 83% => OK
No of words: 230.0 271.125827815 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.9652173913 6.08160592843 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89432290496 4.04852973271 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.378260869565 0.374372842146 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.282608695652 0.287516216867 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.126086956522 0.187439937562 67% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0782608695652 0.113142543107 69% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40822472245 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55652173913 0.539623497131 103% => OK
Word variations: 53.1338131356 53.8517498576 99% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 32.8571428571 21.7502111507 151% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.4326046322 49.3711431718 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 196.0 132.220823453 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8571428571 21.7502111507 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.57142857143 0.878197800319 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 3.39072847682 354% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 61.1180124224 50.5018328374 121% => OK
Elegance: 1.49295774648 1.90840788429 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202051597368 0.549887131256 37% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.172472809363 0.142949733639 121% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0486708954967 0.0787303798458 62% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.768509826941 0.631733273073 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.14027158118 0.139662658121 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113975731779 0.266732575781 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504868757357 0.103435571967 49% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.402381957838 0.414875509568 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.120564601983 0.0530846634433 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150014688525 0.40443939384 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321543859219 0.0528353158467 61% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.49668874172 86% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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