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This is obvious that world changing so quickly but has this a relationship with people happiness or satisfaction? We know that our life has a great influence on our feel and thinking and changing in the world can have an impact on our life. I rather agree with the statement. I will discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs.
First, population of community is increasing and this cause an explosion of demands. In the modern life people have to work hard and they must find good and secure job for themselves. Job is an important factor in our life and that is way for making money and providing supply, also job is an indicator for social level of persons. Restriction in availability of jobs and the low salary of jobs have bad effect on people mentality and they lead people to have concern about getting a job or even consistency of their own job. In this situation people have to work hard to getting a job or getting a promotion in their jobs. This attempt need plenty of time to preparing someone to have a good job, and overwhelming in the working life is not good for human happiness or satisfy from life. In our country, especially in Tehran people work approximately all the day and they are always exhausted from work, when I was student in Tehran, I saw people was sleeping in the bus and they look liked be really exhausted. Working hard can effect on people life particularly in their family relationship because they have a little time to spend with their family and this might be harmful for their life. The chaotic condition in the job and in the home probably make a terrible life, which we never want that. In contrast people in the past were happy because job and economy was the last option to thinking and people always liked to have a enjoyment life for example availability of job was huge and people were able to take a job that they want and the economy of world was better than now.
Second, nowadays, the political and economical changing in the world is higher than past and stability of community especially developing countries are low. People are concerned about their life because they do not trust to condition of economy and politics. Another important factor is changing in technology and products, which young people are the targeted consumer for them. Think about car, car is a product that people need this for traveling or a going around city. One small and low price car can be a good option to buying but young people often like to have cool and best cars. Car companies response to their wants and they product expensive cars with a lot of options. Although a lot of young people like to have these cars but small proportion of them can obtain these expensive cars. Other young people feel bad and they are not happy for own equipment. This behavior is more visual now than the past. People likes to have every great things now and they have to work a lot to low salary these are reasons that people are not happy.
Human beings are interested in reliable things and changing in the world can has some negative effects on people happiness.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1304, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...ible life, which we never want that. In contrast people in the past were happy because j...
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Line 2, column 1431, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hinking and people always liked to have a enjoyment life for example availability...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, so, for example, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 555.0 407.700716846 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59099099099 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44499658048 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.41981981982 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2531252556 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.92 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
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Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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