“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit.”
The petition sent to the residents of Youngtown by environmental protection group mainly concluded that the smith corporation should not be allowed to develop land in the youngtown wildlife preserve area which hinders the privacy of the birds. There are many of the questions which are needed to be answered in this argument.
Firstly, they stated that the smith corporation should not be allowed to develop land that is now part of wildlife preserve. But it has not been said that since when the area became the part of wildlife preserve and when the land was sanctioned to smith corporation for the development whether the area was under the wildlife preserve area. If so then who has sanctioned the land to smith corporation for development should be checked upon. As the plans had been made by the corporation for development of the land so it may result in a big loss to the corporation.
Secondly, it has been stated that only small amount of land will be given to smith. Then what is the problem in allowing to develop such small land? As the wildlife preserve area is generally larger in area so by sanctioning only small land to the smith corporation it may not create very big impact.
Thirdly, the company is planning to build the hotel in that area and it has promised to ensure the preservation of sanctuary. So what are the problems in building the hotel in that area should be first researched. Also the petition was made after sometime after the land was given to the smith and they made a plan to build the hotel there. So other consequences should be checked by the head environmental protection group that is the petition really made to preserve the area or there has been some rivalries of smith corporation who had given the money to the person of environmental protection group for stopping the work of smith corporation.
Fourthly, it has been stated that if the hotel is built than it will hinder the birds privacy and hence the number of visitors in the area will be reduced. But there are also other possibilities like if the hotel is built in the area than more number of visitors will be willing to live near the area and hence ultimately the number visitors will be increasing to the area.
In conclusion all above factors should be taken into consideration before any step is taken by the environmental protection group. The step should be taken keeping in mind that it proves beneficiary for the smith as well as it also helps to preserve the area. This can be done by imposing some of the rules which the hotel needs to abide by for the preservation of area.
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- “The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the la 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'developing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: developing
...h. Then what is the problem in allowing to develop such small land? As the wildlife preser...
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Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...in allowing to develop such small land? As the wildlife preserve area is generally...
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Line 4, column 214, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...n that area should be first researched. Also the petition was made after sometime af...
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Line 5, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
... hotel is built than it will hinder the birds privacy and hence the number of visitor...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...sitors in the area will be reduced. But there are also other possibilities like if the hotel is buil...
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Line 6, column 289, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... the area. This can be done by imposing some of the rules which the hotel needs to abide by...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 459.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65577342048 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63730147119 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.357298474946 0.468620217663 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 671.4 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.91840509 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.722222222 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314744783902 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125323953358 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777043376386 0.0701772020484 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1863488157 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817984766592 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.5979740519 80% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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