A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college
In most developing countries, children born to a lower socio-economic class are at a disavantage. With only enough money to attend public schools, they are not exposed to the same teachings as their counterparts in higher socio-economic classes, able to afford private instiutions. I argue that every child, regardless of social or economic background be given the opportunity to reach their full potential.
A national curriculum would help to ensure that this statement is true. It allows these children, born at a disadantage, the opportunity to take charge of their education and their learning. An even playing field is set, they are no longer held hostage by their background.
Take Jack for example, from a very young age, he had shown signs of being a math prodige. Jack's principal had advised Jack's parents to send him to a private institution where his talents could be further developed. However, Jack's parents could barely afford public school. A decision was made to keep Jack in public school. Regardless of the fact that, he was working at the same level as students 2 grades ahead of him. Jack experienced a diservice, just because of the background he was born into.
Some might argue that a national curriculum could possibly be detrimental to gifted children (children born with higher IQ's and capabilities). By forcing them to learn at the same pace as their classmates, these children are being hindered from tapping into their gifts. I argue that that is a misleading conclusion, the national curriculum would only allow many more children the opportunity to tap into their gifts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
... might argue that a national curriculum could possibly be detrimental to gifted children child...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: children
...could possibly be detrimental to gifted children children born with higher IQs and capabilities. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1350.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 264.0 442.535393258 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11363636364 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87706288031 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1603311829 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.0 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.86666666667 5.21951772744 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102757519014 0.243740707755 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374228926419 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486794974567 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0654012120407 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370160835398 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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