Some people believe that schools should only teach subjects which are beneficial to children's future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this era of cut-throat competition, a vast majority of people give much emphasis only on academic subjects. This is the reason they argue that school boards should eliminate non-academic subjects such as music and sports from the school curriculum. However, I strongly advocate that these subjects are crucial to the holistic development of a child.
To begin with, sport offers a plethora of opportunities to children to explore and reduce the stress level, which generates automatically from parental and peer pressure. Owing to the huge burden of annual examination, and in order to achieve high grades students, students often study for long hours that makes them physically inactive. According to a study carried out by an Indian journal of health and fitness found that many school children usually suffer from immense strain because they are overburden by academic subjects, causing frustration and depression, especially, among teenagers. Hence, extra-curricular activities are mandatory in school's syllabus so that pupils get chance to improve their standard of physical health.
Furthermore, music help learners to broaden their horizons of creativity. It is evident that introducing art in the early childhood years can help foster a positive attitude toward learning curiosity as artistic education develops the whole brain and a child's imagination. Also, playing a piece of musical instruments, learners are encouraged to think and promote craftsmanship instead of mediocre work. Music can be challenging for all pupils, but it can keep them interested and engaged in school hours. Teaching art; thereby, could hone the innate talent of gifted children and paves way for a famous artist of tomorrow.
To conclude, while other subjects are quite essential in order to acquire knowledge, non-academic subjects definitely help students to cope with various obstacles that hinder their physical and mental growth. From my perspective, in the contemporary era, these subjects play a vital role in the overall development of a child, and thus should not be removed from the school curriculum.
- Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view. 67
- Some people believe that schools should only teach subjects which are beneficial to children's future career and therefore other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 96
- You will be moving to a new office soon. Write a letter to the general manager to request some necessary equipment for your future office•what equipment will you need and when•explain why you need and when•suggest where to get it from and why 81
- Why littering in cities and villages is increasingly common problem Write it s consequences and solution to curb the problem 95
- Many people believe that international tourism is a bad thing for their country. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to change this negative attitude towards international tourism? 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'overburdened'.
Suggestion: overburdened
...er from immense strain because they are overburden by academic subjects, causing frustrati...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, while, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1789.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50461538462 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93455237355 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.649230769231 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2212164331 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.785714286 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186742718253 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0583063186985 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517052688735 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113052632181 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555336742307 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.