The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, transportation of goods across countries is increasing as a result of globalisation. While some people believe this is essential for the growth of economy, others feel it hampers the businesses of local industries. Although it is important that local industries should be allowed to flourish, overall growth of the economy is key for development of the nation and also its people.
Local industries tend to be suffer when large multinational companies venture in similar fields. One of the reasons is that these giant companies have more revenue which can be invested for worldwide transportation as compared to the small native industries. For example, simple industries like clothing and textile are affected because of international brands like Levis or Puma because of there widespread marketing. This shows how small companies lose because of loss of global marketing.
However, international companies are known to provide increased job opportunities for the local community. As the company flourishes there is increased income for the people and gross economy for the nation. An example of this is cities like hongkong which have large scale companies and provide jobs to millions of people. Also, many people are involved in the transportation of these goods and this further adds to the employment opportunities. This proves that international companies are essential for the national economy.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that , despite the drawback of damaging the local industries , global mobilization of goods has far more advantages for the people and also the financial development of the country.
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Essay evaluation report
overall growth of the economy is key for development of the nation and also its people.
overall the growth of the economy is the key for the development of the nation and also its people.
Local industries tend to be suffer
Local industries tend to suffer
despite the drawback of damaging the local industries
despite the drawbacks of damaging the local industries
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flaws:
1. No. of Words: 251 350 //need more content. put two reasons in the second paragraph and third paragraph. around 300 words will be perfect.
2. No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2 //you have little issues on singular/plural, article...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 251 350
No. of Characters: 1349 1500
No. of Different Words: 131 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.98 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.375 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.996 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.308 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.497 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Is the score 5.5 only because
Is the score 5.5 only because of the word count and few grammar mistakes .. how can I get a 7 on this essay then
As told above, put two
Yes.
As told above, put two reasons in the second paragraph and third paragraph. around 300 words will be perfect to reach 7.0 or over.
You don't have serious language issues till now, only need to put more content from this essay.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of goods across countries is increasing as a result of globalisation. While some...
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Line 7, column 36, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... In conclusion, I strongly feel that , despite the drawback of damaging the lo...
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Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rawback of damaging the local industries , global mobilization of goods has far mo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1397.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56573705179 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09250588032 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533864541833 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5247173403 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.461538462 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3076923077 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177137430763 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0712288268175 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615787548137 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124272741464 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069500652008 0.056905535591 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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